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Post by overtninja on May 7, 2011 8:26:08 GMT
B
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Post by Yushinoki on May 7, 2011 18:24:33 GMT
B
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Post by vegeta on May 8, 2011 2:57:09 GMT
B vote
Zeo. I've been reading this, and I'll be honest: So far, I'm interested in your story. I like what you're doing story-wise. My ONE issue is... When did Naruto's thinking become so... advanced? I'm very used to his simple-mindedness from canon. Subsequently, his language register is so formal. If anything, those are the only things I've really noticed that are different. Not that I'm opposed, because your creative writing is well versed in my opinion.
Unfortunately, I'm a little disappointed in coming completely clean to the Hokage. I almost think that we should have thought more before revealing everything. We could've managed on our own for a while before we revealed it. Aw well.
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Post by Zeo on May 8, 2011 16:22:08 GMT
B voteZeo. I've been reading this, and I'll be honest: So far, I'm interested in your story. I like what you're doing story-wise. My ONE issue is... When did Naruto's thinking become so... advanced? I'm very used to his simple-mindedness from canon. Subsequently, his language register is so formal. If anything, those are the only things I've really noticed that are different. Not that I'm opposed, because your creative writing is well versed in my opinion. Unfortunately, I'm a little disappointed in coming completely clean to the Hokage. I almost think that we should have thought more before revealing everything. We could've managed on our own for a while before we revealed it. Aw well. Thank you. In recent chapters of the manga Naruto has been showing more intelligence while still staying true to his other personality aspects, and I think that if he ever has a chance of actually being Hokage in the future he'll have to start showing more of the same. When I started writing this I intended for him to already have made much of that progression, since from the intro he was already defeated, captured, and deprived of the Kyuubi. He's had to try and think smarter to stay alive in the war leading up to that intro, which I intended to be similar but different from the one we have in canon. The formal aspect is something he'll change up in time as he starts getting used to the past again. Also, with what is to come, everything would have gone smoother if the Hokage hadn't been told what was going on. That will definitely provide tension between you and him. On a sidenote I'm probably going to be too busy in real life to contribute anything to this until maybe Wednesday. I'm hoping sooner but that should be the absolute final deadline before this goes any further, sorry guys.
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Post by vegeta on May 8, 2011 18:34:45 GMT
I understand the business. I have college finals this week. And thanks for addressing my concerns.
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Post by mrdrman on May 10, 2011 22:41:27 GMT
A. Reached Sage Mode pretty quick with the Hokage.
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Post by Zeo on May 11, 2011 18:06:45 GMT
Thinking quickly, feeling your blood turn cold at his words and knowing he can do just that if he is experienced in the Sharingan's powers, you force your eyes shut tightly and concentrate on the domain of the seal-cage.
Danzo shunshin's forward and grips your hair tightly, making a note of derision in his throat, but it turns to unheard fury at the empty look left across your features just in time.
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You miserably little FOOL! the Kyuubi practically roars at you a moment later after you splash down into a pool of muddy water. Do you know what you have just done?! it continues, the fur along the body standing on edge and the fangs fully exposed.
"What? What did I do?!" You shout back at it in frustration, feeling none too charitable yourself after this turn of events. It's eyes widen further as chakra suffused wind gathers behind the cage and with a heavy noise of of currents only to be thrown forward by the nine tails acting in union; leveling gale-force winds at your body.
You yelp and dive aside in time to avoid being torn apart by the assault. Listen, and listen well, brat. it growls furiously a moment later.
Your MIND may be safe down here, secluded as it is, for a long minute-- if that. Have you forgotten that thrice now those of the Uchiha line have invaded this place? That... monstrous union of Uchiha and Senju blood will soon be able to track my leftover chakra within you to this place. it explains.
"Oh. Oh, crap." You had forgotten about that amid the chaos of the moment, but it was true enough. "So now what?" you ask since it didn't look like there was much else to be done.
The fox attempts to laugh at that, but all that comes out is an unpleasant snarl. Utilize your precious Sage Mode to weaken the wood release cage that binds your waking form. it says flatly.
Frowning at the simplicity and why you didn't come up with it in the first place, you settle down and concentrate. On the outside you know your body is internally calling upon the naturally occurring chakra within that place and gathering it at your core, to blend and mingle together.
You can't allow it to fully materialize until you leave here, though. If you do that Danzo is just as likely to slit your throat to prevent any kind of escape.
"Thanks." You say simply to the fox, even knowing the only reason it said anything was that it's survival was more or less tied to your own at this point.
A moment later and you step back into yourself just as your ears register the resultant crack of wood surrendering.
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Your golden eyes flash open in an instant as you come into Sage Mode and consciousness together, henging into your more natural teenage body once more.
Danzo shields his face from the shrapnel even as he thrusts the wind-blade down at your own in an attempt to stop you.
You turn astride to avoid it and quickly put some working distance between you and him. He swears furiously at the sight that greets him, then performs a multitude of seals.
In that same time frame you call a pair of clones into being to aide you, knowing that looking directly at the elder shinobi would be the same as accepting his assault to your mind.
What do you do? A. Call up a Rasengan for each of you, then risk a few critical insights to your memories and rush him- 80% B. The same as A, only with the Rasenshuriken- 60% C. Try to distract Danzo long enough to go back into your mind and negotiate with the Kyuubi for the Rikudo Mode once more- 40% D. Stay on the defensive and try to find an opening to escape.
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Some general insight here: Naruto can use Sage Mode at anytime and the old Kyuubi Shroud because those parts of him can be easily gathered, and accessed through the present seal.
If he wants to use the full brunt of the Kyuubi Shroud(Rikudo Mode, due to looks) he would need to either defeat it in his mindscape again as he did with the help of Bee and Kushina, or otherwise broker a temporary agreement between them.
Taking the time to have a full on fight against the Kyuubi while your clones try to defend your outer body will probably see you dead, but if it succeeds the entire future of the story will be heavily altered from what its intended to become. You would also have two aces up your sleeve if you chose to go through with it anyway, so choose wisely.
I give the Rasenshuriken a lesser chance of victory and survival due to the complexity of the jutsu and the chance that Danzo can always find the memory regarding it and how to avoid.
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Post by dragonfantasy on May 11, 2011 18:24:59 GMT
C, it looks like the best choice overall. Hopefully we get very lucky.
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Post by overtninja on May 11, 2011 18:28:19 GMT
A
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Post by Yushinoki on May 11, 2011 22:09:14 GMT
A
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Post by vegeta on May 12, 2011 2:34:21 GMT
A vote - We really need to kill Danzo NOW, before he becomes a bigger problem. While I do admit that Rikudo mode would be optimal, we have double the chance at being successful here.
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Post by mrdrman on May 12, 2011 3:14:02 GMT
A.
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Post by Zeo on May 12, 2011 23:08:02 GMT
Coming to a decision you thrust either hand out and they quickly place one of their own beside it, locking into a semi-triangle. Danzo spits out a series of wind release streams in that timeframe, and with a grunt the left most clone throws himself in front to absorb the damage.
He evaporates after a few hits into the usual smoke, taking with him a portion of your senjutsu chakra, but in turn two fully formed Rasengan flow into existence between you and the remaining one.
He charges ahead at Danzo and throws the first toward his lower legs, and as expected the elder shinobi evades by taking to the air, using the momentum to slash through it's head and cross the distance exceptionally swiftly.
You're ready. Staring up at the enemy you mentally and physically fortify your reserves be drawing upon the Kyuubi's Shroud of tainted orange and red chakra, and in the final moment before he lands the both of you strike;
Another exhalation of wind chakra sends him rotating in place and creates a diamond-shaped barrier, and you rake your ethereal claws along it seeking a weakness for the Rasengan to pierce through-- to no avail.
On his next rotation he brings that blade up and finds your own armor just as impenetrable in turn. No choice for it, then. You think just as a stab of pain runs through your mind, flooring you and nearly knocking you right off your feet; and your grip over the ninjutsu releases in response, sending it crashing to the ground as before and exploding violently.
The force behind it flips you end over end for a dozen feet and leaves behind rents in the Shroud where rock was accelerated, grazing your skin, but the effect worked in part; Danzo was also slammed in the other direction, and unlike you his wind chakra had no hope of defending him once his rotation was halted.
Two different spires of rock jut out of his chest and the side of the stomach respectively, and as he stares down at them in a rising expression of disbelief you just grin viciously and not a little unlike the fox would.
That only lasts as long as you realize your limbs won't move.
What happened? A. Danzo shut down your motor functions with Shisui's Mind Control jutsu, and he uses Izanagi to repair himself. B. Same as A, but he doesn't risk wasting a Sharingan eye and slips off to repair himself through one of the ROOT medical nin. C. You broke your back in the chaos of being thrown around so violently and landing wrong, but the damage to Danzo is great enough that he dies before he can bring Izanagi to bare. D. Same as C, but you both endure and heal quickly; him with Izanagi, you through the Kyuubi's advanced healing.
I've been thinking about this. Technically speaking, this fight is meant to end on his escape, but this is a CYOA and not a fic in the traditional sense. We can either let him slip off to be a thorn down the road, seeing as he can't actually harm you right now despite disabling your movement, or put a stop to him within minutes.
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Post by overtninja on May 12, 2011 23:28:41 GMT
Does C mean we die?
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Post by Zeo on May 12, 2011 23:45:26 GMT
Ah, no. I worded that a little poorly. C just means you are paralyzed for a while in enemy territory.
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Post by mrdrman on May 12, 2011 23:54:09 GMT
I'll go B.
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Post by overtninja on May 13, 2011 0:03:25 GMT
C. Danzo will only prove to be a major pain in the ass in this story unless he dies right now.
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Post by Yushinoki on May 13, 2011 0:18:01 GMT
C
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Post by vegeta on May 13, 2011 0:59:57 GMT
Honestly, C would be giving a LOT of credit to Naruto's battle skills. But for some reason, I'm not completely opposed to it. He had to become a better fighter after he lost the Kyuubi. But yeah, I figured Danzo would be more powerful considering he was the one in control from the start, and he seemed like a defensive fighter in canon (which means that A, B, or D make a lot of sense). But considering Danzo's intelligence, and his willingness to work with enemies of Konoha, like Orochimaru, I'm gonna go with the easier vote.
C vote
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Post by dragonfantasy on May 13, 2011 11:41:08 GMT
C, finally. A CYOA with Danzo dead!
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Post by overtninja on May 13, 2011 13:49:19 GMT
High 5!
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Post by perfectcell34 on May 13, 2011 13:56:28 GMT
C
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Post by giga on May 13, 2011 14:15:30 GMT
"Naruto... you... will lose..." Danzo exhales with a tired and pain expression.
Suddenly, the door opens. A dark, handsome man walks in the room. He takes out a syringe full of red liquid and jams it into Danzo's arm. His expression immediately lights up, and with a contained scream pushes himself off the rock spires. With disbelief you watch as Danzo's wounds heal in front of your eyes.
"How...?" you slowly articulate. Danzo merely grins.
"Plasma Bolt," Danzo says.
"GG MOTHERFUCKER!" 21 shouts as he gives you a Plasma Bolt to your face.
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Post by overtninja on May 13, 2011 14:37:29 GMT
Failure.
21 would never help Danzo. Would of been better if 21 healed Danzo just to kill him again.
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Post by giga on May 13, 2011 14:49:33 GMT
Oddly I was thinking Naruto was sent to the past before 21 met Itachi. Failure indeed.
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